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The thought of you and I
Is like a chimpanzee
Shouting French at me,
“Vous etes un singe",
With each swing by.

The thought of you and I
Is like the measured laugh,
The type the short giraffe
Has learnt will fall
From those up high.

The thought of you and I
Is like a lion at rest
Trying to pump its breast
For one last roar
Or one last sigh.
©2007-2009 ~YvesMB
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Another fun thing to write.
vous etes un singe=you are a monkey
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i really like the animal motif, rhyme scheme, and the repetition of the first line of each stanza. the rhyme arrangement does well to keep a concise poem like this from sounding trite. and the first line repetition is very whistful. very phonetically pleasing. very good work.
and the lack of sleep makes me want to add an "h" to the word "wistful" for some reason...
the thought of you is like an animal,
only because i don't want to be specific enough to name one in particular.

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i can see in the darkness because i'm no longer blinded by the light.
as the shadows carry me to obscurity.
Good theme, an orangutan calling me a monkey. Darwin be damned

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You will judge me based on this signature.
Love the animal repetition, you could easily add to this too. Lovely idea.

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Poetry is truly boundless. It is my passion, writing to you, that is. I am the canvas.
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my poetry, lemon
both bitter and tart
you decide the taste of my art

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